Review

The feedback from Jodie Smith contained 2 points on which I had to address in my scripts. One of them being that the show has a relatively small budget to work with and one of my sketches was set in a posh restaurant so I had to change the scenery to a less posh restaurant to keep in with the budget. In my opinion, this has taken some comedy out of the script as the beginning was in contrast with the end as it was supposed to be an extremely posh/ expensive restaurant and the waiter sits down and eats the food off the man and woman's plate but it is still easy to work around.

The other point is about copyright with me using the name 'ET' and whether it would be allowed to be used. So to prevent any issues occurring I changed the name to 'TE'. In my opinion it adds another comic dimension to the script as people may not know from the beginning what the script is about but as it goes on they will then realise that it is based on the film 'ET'.

When creating scripts, they have to be ran by several people before they can even be considered to be made into a finished product. Having written my own scripts and receiving feedback I feel as I now have a better understanding on what scripts/ script writers have to go through before they can be finalised.

3 scripts changed & Shooting Script

 

 

task 6 - cover letter, treatment & feedback

3 scripts & Shooting Script

 

 

Task 3 - brainstorming plans

Radio script analysis

 

•Format and style – the layout of the script is simple, with names of the characters on the far left of the page and what they say towards the middle/ right of the page. When SFX are used it is marked with F/X and what effect is used on the right and the whole sentence is underlined to break it up from the rest of the script. The language used is relatively formal but there is some crude language used like ‘arsed’. Other than that it is relatively well spoken. This particular script doesn’t address the audience because it is meant to entertain.

•Content – in the script, the content is what the characters have to say and the sound effects.

•Narrative structure – the beginning is of a man waking up with a hangover from a night out of drinking and he walks downstairs into the kitchen. The middle is of him and his girlfriend argueing because he never phoned her and she is making loud nioses by chopping stuff up and blending it. The end is of his girlfriend blending up all of his money and the forceing him to drink it.

•Genre – this is a comodey, when heard on the radio would entertain you with the sound effects and you realise that she knows more than she is letting on.
 

•Target audience – the target audience is middle aged housewives. Swearing and crude language appeal to the audience as well as shouting as they might not expect it and want to know what’s happened or what is going on. It is made for radio 4 listeners.

Film script analysis

 

•Format and style – the layout is the generic layout and fairly simple to follow. It is the same as all movie scripts with slug lines which inform you where it's set. There is also the action which tells you what happens. Dialogue is used which is what the actors say.

•Content – the script includes all spoken lines, settings of the stage instructions, making sure the lines are delivered with the correct body language.

•Narrative structure – in the beginning you see and elderly woman packing up her belongings and moves into Newyork and lives with her daughter. The middle of the story is the elderly lady see's a gang of bikers and starts to have strange nightmares about mixint up theese bikeers with the dead husband and she's afraid. The end of the story is the lady is locked out of the apartment where she lives and one of the bikers comes over to try and help her get back in and she starts to think that there not all that bad, they then invite her in to the place they all hang out at and she tidy's it up for them and she also cooks them a meal. They then become friends then the lady has to leave so they give her a huge send off. 
 

•Genre – the genre of the script is a drama, made for entertainment purposes.

•Target audience – the film is appropriate for all general audience viewing, however the focus is primarily for a competition, as this is a common way to make yourself known in the film industry.  It won an Oscar in 2000 for best short film.